"The Bush Song"

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In This Issue: February 2005

Editorial
Letters To The Editor
Traditional Featured Poet - Adam Lindsay Gordon
Modern Featured Poet - Glenny Palmer
Events & Competitions
Your Chance To Win
Copyright Information
Subscription Information

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Editorial or "Ric's Ramblings"

G'day and welcome to another edition of "The Bush Song". You are visitor number:

We hope you all had a great Christmas and New Year. No doubt, like us, it was full on and hectic. It just seems the silly season takes over completely from the rest of your life and it ends up on hold for a month or so.

Changes To The Site

There have been some significant changes on the Australian Bush Poetry, Verse and Music site. The site has been finally upgraded to one that suits a 1024 x 768 format. This provides much more screen real estate and makes things less cramped. Furthermore, we have upgraded the Forum to a completely new format. We had been having problems with the old one for ages, mainly with people posting spam onto the forum which had to be removed every morning. The new forum provides a situation where people must register (which is free of course) if they are going to post a message. This removes the spam situation completely. Now we don't want you to be shy, so register and have a say in what's going on or post some of your poetry.

Free Web Sites Available

The Central Goldfields Bush Poets (Verse & Song) have recently put up their own website at http://www.cgbushpoets.websyte.com.au/ . Websites are available at no charge for non profit groups and associations. If you are in a group, then perhaps you should consider setting up your own site. It's a great way to promote your group, advise meeting dates and locations. You can use the site in all your publicity and attract new members or audiences to your group. It is quite easy to write the site as the site owners provide an easy format so people who are not necessarily web writing literate can set up their own pages. For more information go to http://www.communityguide.com.au .

Australia Day 2005

One of my pet hates is the continuous creep of the American vernacular into our language. I get a shiver up my spine when I am called a "guy" and not a bloke. Those of you who have had emails from me will have seen the rider on my signature stating "I'm NOT a guy, I'm a BLOKE!!!". One of the poems I perform regularly is one by Noel Cutler (with his kind permission of course) entitled "Call Me Aussie Mate!". It's a great poem that addresses this very issue of language. Well now I have decided to take this all one step further and have ordered stubby holders printed with "I'm NOT a guy, I'm a BLOKE!!!". Keep an eye on the website for when these become available.

Recently I was honoured to be asked to speak at an Australia Day ceremony about what it means to me to be an Aussie. Well you can be assured that the "guy" issue got a bit of a run, but overall I spoke about the things that draw us all together as Australians. Personally, I don't think there is any one greater thing than the song Waltzing Matilda. I was most fortunate to be able to obtain a copy of the late Johnny Johansen's poem "Song of a Nation" complete with the introduction that Johnny wrote to the poem. I read the introduction to the crowd and then performed the poem. It is a brilliant piece of work by Johnny, who was a good mate of mine, and I felt very priveleged to perform this great piece of his work on such an occasion.

Visit to Mt Gambier

Jude and I recently went on a day trip to Mount Gambier in South Australia and visited the Blue Lake. This was the reputed site of the famous leap by Adam Lindsay Gordon, one of our great old masters. Apart from our usual modern poet to be featured, we are going to feature this poet in this newsletter as well to provide a bit more information on him. Gordon was probably one of the lesser poets. Everyone seems to mention Henry Lawson and the Banjo straight away, but start to struggle when asked about others.

Thanks to all our subscribers and contributors for supporting the site and the newsletter. Talk to you all again soon.


Letters To The Editor

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Traditional Featured Poet - Adam Lindsay Gordon

GORDON, ADAM LINDSAY (1833-1870),

Gordon was born at Fayal in the Azores on 19 October 1833. His father, Captain Adam Durnford Gordon, had married his first cousin, Harriet Gordon, and both were descended from Adam of Gordon of the ballad, and were connected with other distinguished men of the intervening 500 years. Captain Gordon was then staying at the Azores for the sake of his wife's health. They were back in England living at Cheltenham in 1840, and in 1841 Gordon went to Cheltenham College. He was there for only about a year. Subsequently he was sent to a school kept by the Rev. Samuel Ollis Garrard in Gloucestershire. In 1848 he went to the Royal Military Academy, Woolwich. There he appears to have been good at sports, but not studious and certainly undisciplined. In June 1851 his father was requested to withdraw him and the young man, he was nearly 18, was again admitted a pupil at Cheltenham College. He was not there for long, he appears to have left in the middle of 1852, but the story that he was expelled from Cheltenham is without foundation. He lived for some time with an uncle at Worcester, and was a private pupil of the headmaster of the Worcester Royal Grammar School.

He began to lead a wild and aimless life, contracted debts, and was a great anxiety to his father, who at last decided that his son should go to Australia and make a fresh start. Gordon had fallen in love with a girl of 17, Jane Bridges, who was able to tell the story 60 years afterwards to his biographers. He did not declare his love until he came to say good-bye to her before leaving for Australia on 7 August 1853. "With characteristic recklessness he offered to sacrifice the passage he had taken to Australia, and all his father's plans for giving him a fresh start in life, if she would tell him not to go, or promise to be his wife, or even give him some hope." This Miss Bridges could not do, though she liked the shy handsome boy and remembered him with affection to the end of a long life. It was the one romance of Gordon's life.

That Gordon realized his conduct had fallen much below what it might have been can be seen in his poems ... "To my Sister", written three days before he left England, and "Early Adieux", evidently written about the same time. He was just over 20 when he arrived at Adelaide on 14 November 1853. He immediately obtained a position in the South Australian mounted police and was stationed at Mount Gambier and Penola.

On 4 November 1855 he resigned from the force and took up horse breaking in the south-eastern district of South Australia. The interest in horse racing, which he had shown as a youth in England, was continued in Australia, and in a letter written in November 1854 he mentioned that he had a horse for the steeplechase at the next meeting.

In 1857 he met the Rev. Julian Tenison Woods (q.v.) who lent him books and talked poetry with him. He then had the reputation of being "a good steady lad and a splendid horseman". In this year his father died and he also lost his mother about two years later. From her estate he received about £7000 towards the end of 1861. He was making a reputation as a rider over hurdles, and several times either won or was placed in local hurdle races and steeplechases.

On 20 October 1862 he married Margaret Park, then a girl of 17. In March 1864 he bought a cottage, Dingley Dell, near Port MacDonnell, and in this same year, inspired by six engravings after Noel Paton illustrating "The Dowie Dens 0' Yarrow", Gordon wrote a poem "The Feud", of which 30 copies were printed at Mount Gambier.

On 11 January 1865 he received a deputation asking him to stand for parliament and was eventually elected by three votes to the house of assembly. He spoke several times but had no talent for speaking in public, and he resigned his seat on 20 November 1866. He was contributing verse to the Australasian and Bell's Life in Victoria and doing a fair amount of riding. He bought some land in Western Australia, but returned from a visit to it early in 1867 and went to live at Mount Gambier. On 10 June 1867 he published Ashtaroth, a Dramatic Lyric, and on the nineteenth of the same month Sea Spray and Smoke Drift.

In November he rented Craig's livery stables at Ballarat, but he had no head for business and the venture was a failure. In March 1868 he had a serious accident, a horse smashing his head against a gatepost of his own yard. His daughter, born on 3 May 1867, died at the age of 11 months, his financial difficulties were increasing, and he fell into very low spirits. In spite of short sight he was becoming very well known as a gentleman rider, and on 10 October 1868 actually won three races in one day at the Melbourne Hunt Club steeplechase meeting. He rode with great patience and judgment, but his want of good sight was always a handicap. He began riding for money but was not fortunate and had more than one serious fall.

He sold his business and left Ballarat in October 1868 and came to Melbourne. He had succeeded in straightening his financial affairs and was more cheerful. He made a little money out of his racing and became a member of the Yorick Club, where he was friendly with Marcus Clarke (q.v.), George Gordon McCrae (q.v.), and a little later Henry Kendall (q.v.).

On 12 March 1870 Gordon had a bad fall while riding in a steeplechase at Flemington. His head was injured and he never completely recovered. He had for some time been endeavouring to show that he was heir to the estate of Esslemont in Scotland, but there was a flaw in the entail, and in June he learnt that his claim must be abandoned. He had seen his last book, Bush Ballads and Galloping Rhymes, through the press, and it was published on 23 June 1870. Gordon on that day met Kendall who showed him the proof of the favourable review he had written for the Australasian. But Gordon had just asked his publishers what he owed them for printing the book, and realized that he had no money to pay them and no prospects.

He went home to his cottage at Brighton carrying a package of cartridges for his rifle. Next morning he rose early, walked into the tea-tree scrub and shot himself. His wife went back to South Australia, married again, and lived until November 1919. In October 1870 a stone was placed over his grave at Brighton by his friends, and in 1932 a statue to his memory by Paul Montfort was unveiled near parliament house, Melbourne. In May 1934 his bust was placed in Westminster Abbey.

Gordon was tall and handsome (see portrait prefixed to The Laureate of the Centaurs). But he stooped and held himself badly, partly on account of his short sight. He was shy, sensitive and, even before he was overwhelmed with troubles, inclined to be moody. After his head was injured at Ballarat he was never the same man again, and subsequent accidents aggravated his condition. Any suggestion that drink was a contributing cause may be disregarded. (Sir) Frank Madden who was with him the day before his death said that he was then absolutely sober, "he never cared for it (drink) and so far as I know seldom took it at all". The Rev. Tenison Woods in his "Personal Reminiscences" said "Those who did not know Gordon attributed his suicide to drink, but I repeat he was most temperate and disliked the company of drinking men". His tragic death drew much attention to his work and especially in Melbourne the appreciation of it became overdone. This led to a revulsion of feeling among better judges and for a time it was underrated in some quarters. Much of his verse is careless and banal, there are passages in Ashtaroth for instance that are almost unbelievably bad, but at his best he is a poet of importance, who on occasions wrote some magnificent lines. Douglas Sladen, a life-long admirer, in his Adam Lindsay Gordon, The Westminster Abbey Memorial Volume has made a selection of 27 poems which occupy about 90 pages. Without subscribing to every poem selected it may be said that Gordon is most adequately represented in a sheaf of this kind. His most sustained effort, the "Rhyme of Joyous Garde", has some glorious stanzas, and on it and some 20 other poems Gordon's fame may be allowed to rest.

References:
Edith Humphris and Douglas Sladen, Adam Lindsay Gordon and His Friends in England and Australia; J. Howlett-Ross, The Laureate of the Centaurs; Julian E. Tenison Woods, "Personal Reminiscences of Adam Lindsay Gordon", Melbourne Review, 1884; Edith Humphris, The Life of Adam Lindsay Gordon; J. K. Moir, A Chronology of the Life of Adam Lindsay Gordon (at Public Library, Melbourne); Turner and Sutherland, The Development of Australian Literature; P, Serle, A Bibliography of Australasian Poetry and Verse; Douglas Sladen, Adam Lindsay Gordon, The Westminster Abbey Memorial Volume; E. Morris Miller, Australian Literature; F. M. Robb, Introduction to Poems of Adam Lindsay Gordon, Oxford Ed.

Information from The Dictionary of Australian Biography by Percival Serle

Gordons LeapGordon's MonumentThis image at left is one that is located in the old pump house museum at the Blue Lake in Mount Gambier. Apologies for the lens flare, but it was taken inside from below and the painting is covered with glass.

The image at right is the monument erected to commemorate Gordon's Leap. Below the monument is a marker which reads:-
"This monument to Adam Lindsay Gordon was erected in 1887. It was near this site that Gordon, a skilled horseman, performed the daring riding feat known as Gordon's Leap in July 1864. He jumped his horse onto a narrow ledge above the Blue Lake, then turned his horse and repeated the jump back onto the road. Gordon was not only a remarkable rider, but a poet of renown who is honoured by a place in Poets Corner, Westminster Abbey, London."

The marker goes on to say more, but it is covered in his biography above. Gordon was often deeply depressed and it was Gordon's Graveprobably this that led him to taking his own life. The picture at right is of Gordon's grave at Brighton cemetery in Victoria.

This is one of my favourite poems of Adam Lindsay Gordon. It is entitled:-

"The Sick Stockrider"

Hold hard, Ned! Lift me down once more, and lay me in the shade.
Old man, you've had your work cut out to guide
Both horses, and to hold me in the saddle when I sway'd,
All through the hot, slow, sleepy, silent ride.
The dawn at "Moorabinda" was a mist rack dull and dense,
The sunrise was a sullen, sluggish lamp;
I was dozing in the gateway at Arbuthnot's bound'ry fence,
I was dreaming on the Limestone cattle camp.
We crossed the creek at Carricksford, and sharply through the haze,
And suddenly the sun shot flaming forth;
To southward lay "Katawa", with the sandpeaks all ablaze,
And the flush'd fields of Glen Lomond lay to north.
Now westward winds the bridle path that leads to Lindisfarm,
And yonder looms the double-headed Bluff;
From the far side of the first hill, when the skies are clear and calm,
You can see Sylvester's woolshed fair enough.
Five miles we used to call it from our homestead to the place
Where the big tree spans the roadway like an arch;
'Twas here we ran the dingo down that gave us such a chase
Eight years ago -- or was it nine? -- last March.

'Twas merry in the glowing morn, among the gleaming grass,
To wander as we've wandered many a mile,
And blow the cool tobacco cloud, and watch the white wreaths pass,
Sitting loosely in the saddle all the while.
'Twas merry 'mid the blackwoods, when we spied the station roofs,
To wheel the wild scrub cattle at the yard,
With a running fire of stockwhips and a fiery run of hoofs;
Oh! the hardest day was never then too hard!

Aye! we had a glorious gallop after "Starlight" and his gang,
When they bolted from Sylvester's on the flat;
How the sun-dried reed-beds crackled, how the flint-strewn ranges rang
To the strokes of "Mountaineer" and "Acrobat".
Hard behind them in the timber, harder still across the heath,
Close beside them through the tea-tree scrub we dash'd;
And the golden-tinted fern leaves, how they rustled underneath!
And the honeysuckle osiers, how they crash'd!

We led the hunt throughout, Ned, on the chestnut and the grey,
roof contractor Chicago And the troopers were three hundred yards behind,
While we emptied our six-shooters on the bushrangers at bay,
In the creek with stunted box-tree for a blind!
There you grappled with the leader, man to man and horse to horse,
And you roll'd together when the chestnut rear'd;
He blazed away and missed you in that shallow watercourse --
A narrow shave -- his powder singed your beard!

In these hours when life is ebbing, how those days when life was young
Come back to us; how clearly I recall
Even the yarns Jack Hall invented, and the songs Jem Roper sung;
And where are now Jem Roper and Jack Hall?

Aye! nearly all our comrades of the old colonial school,
Our ancient boon companions, Ned, are gone;
Hard livers for the most part, somewhat reckless as a rule,
It seems that you and I are left alone.

There was Hughes, who got in trouble through that business with the cards,
It matters little what became of him;
But a steer ripp'd up MacPherson in the Cooraminta yards,
And Sullivan was drown'd at Sink-or-swim;
And Mostyn -- poor Frank Mostyn -- died at last a fearful wreck,
In "the horrors", at the Upper Wandinong,
And Carisbrooke, the rider, at the Horsefall broke his neck,
Faith! the wonder was he saved his neck so long!

Ah! those days and nights we squandered at the Logans' in the glen --
The Logans, man and wife, have long been dead.
Elsie's tallest girl seems taller than your little Elsie then;
And Ethel is a woman grown and wed.

I've had my share of pastime, and I've done my share of toil,
And life is short -- the longest life a span;
I care not now to tarry for the corn or for the oil,
Or for the wine that maketh glad the heart of man.
For good undone and gifts misspent and resolutions vain,
'Tis somewhat late to trouble. This I know --
I should live the same life over, if I had to live again;
And the chances are I go where most men go.

The deep blue skies wax dusky, and the tall green trees grow dim,
The sward beneath me seems to heave and fall;
And sickly, smoky shadows through the sleepy sunlight swim,
And on the very sun's face weave their pall.
Let me slumber in the hollow where the wattle blossoms wave,
With never stone or rail to fence my bed;
Should the sturdy station children pull the bush flowers on my grave,
I may chance to hear them romping overhead.


Modern Featured Poet - Glenny Palmer

Glenny PalmerWhen I was born I was as light as a feather.....which really tickled my Mother's fancy. That was way back in 19@# in Clermont, central Queensland, to typical “Aussie Battler” parents. The larrikin inherent in the people of the post-war outback community, flourished in me, a freckle faced, carrot haired kid. My father was a poet in demand in the pubs and work campsites, while Mum was undoubtedly related to the original “Aunty Mame”. (Quite an actress.) Dad’s transient work as a plant operator eventually dictated a move to the “Big Smoke” (Brisbane), where my brother and sister and I could have a stable education. While Dad galloped around on bulldozers, we lived with Mum, and waited for the rain to periodically chase Dad home for a few weeks. It was the highlight of our lives when he appeared unannounced on our doorstep, as he would give us each a whole shilling to spend at the pictures! I spent most of my waking hours scheming to run away, back to the bush to Dad.

As a young woman I was in little theatre, singing, and dancing, and also studied at art school. I married young and had 3 daughters, and adopted a baby boy. My first marriage ended after 20 years. (I’m a stayer, not a sprinter.) I have since added 2 step-children to my brood, and am now Grandmother to 15. (I think it was the hormone powder in the chook food!) I have a career background in writing sales training material, and in training and motivating specialty sales people. I was Sales Manager for a large furniture company, responsible for figures for 11 stores with 25 staff . When I re-married, my husband Alan and I established a furniture business, which we ran for 7 years. In my early forties, we chucked it all in, sacked all the kids, and bought a caravan with “The Wandering Wordsmith” painted all over it, and headed for the outback. In 1994 we attended a bush poetry concert in Beaudesert, where I discovered that I was not the only person left still writing ballads…KINDRED SPIRITS…what JOY! The great Bob Miller took me under his wing and took me to Tamworth’s “Fireside Festival”, where I met more of these strange creatures known as “Bush Poets”. I was in Heaven! In 1995 I won the inaugural “Australian Ladies Bush Poetry Championship”. I repeated my win in 1996 and was therefore the first Australian female featured performer at the 1997 “Cowboy Poetry Gathering” in Elko, Nevada, USA, and at the “Autrey Museum Of Western Heritage” in Los Angeles. I was Reserve Champion at the Winton championships in 1997 and 1998. I received the “Australia Day Cultural Award” in 1997, for “Services to Bush Poetry, and the Promotion of the Australian Identity”. This identity is something I encourage all poets to strive to protect, by using our powerful craft. After studying my craft, I received a number of literary awards including the “Henry Lawson Society” (NSW) and was runner up in the “Blackened Billy” awards in 1997, and won that competition in 2001. I was featured on television in “Brisbane Extra”, and “Totally Wild”, and appeared on “Australian Story”.

I now enjoy teaching and presenting my works tailored to individual groups, such as youth organizations, suicide prevention, depression support groups, corporate and political functions, etc. I conduct adult and children’s workshops, and judge /compere/ perform in Australia and overseas. I have been published by Pan McMillan, and the ABC, and have produced 2 poetry books, 2 CD’s and 2 cassette tapes of my work, along with an instructional booklet. I am intensely interested in seeing people reach their potential, and in conveying the asset that poetry is, to personal development. I am keen to pass on the support and knowledge that many Bush Poets have given to me during my time within this marvellous group of creative people.

My husband Alan supports my creativity, and I support his 4x2’s, as we continue to try and build our 2 bedroom cottage, which has only taken up the last 12 years. He operates a small Jumping Castle business, and in our “spare” time, we enjoy our ever expanding family, and our little property, “Fairymeade” in Cedar Vale near Beaudesert, Queensland.

To find out more about Glenny, her books, CDs and cassettes or to talk to her about performances or workshops, contact her at 43-49 Samantha Rd Cedar Vale Q 4285
Ph/fax: 07 55432606
Email: [email protected]

A Poem From Glenny

While working in Perth, WA., there was an uproar about crows pinching rubber windscreen wipers from cars in the town of Bentley. For a week or so the local journalist printed in the paper, all and sundry’s wacky suggestions to fix the problem. Below is my take on it, as written in Rod and Kerry Lee’s lounge room. (There was a Federal election looming at the time.)

“Aaark Raven Mad” © 2004 Glenny Palmer

All the crows from South Australia, New South Wales and Queensland too,
From way down in Tasmania and west of Uluru,
Convened an urgent meeting, for the word had passed around
That plastics were in vogue, no more was rubber to be found.

They never would have known it if this journo had kept quiet,
He said, “There’s some in Bentley….” and next thing there was a riot,
‘cause everyone knows crows love rubber, hoses, bands or boot,
(I‘ve seen them cart away a scuba diver for his suit.)

They descended into Bentley, windscreen wipers were the go,
And unanimously voted as their guard, Sir Russell Crow,
For this was El-Dorado, their Nirvana, Holy Grail,
and God help any bloke who tries to tug on Russell’s tail!

Cro-Magnon ate the first one, and Old Crow she had a feed,
Scare-crow was too stuffed and scared to satisfy his need,
But stone the crows! You should have seen old Vel-crow stick it out,
While Chro-mium insisted on a plate, and pint of stout.

Chro-mosome got drunk and spent the night locked in a cell,
While Cro-chet got a stitch from eating rubber tyres as well.
Cro-quet took a hammering for rolling on the grass,
And Crow’s Feet tried to kick him in his black and shiny sars(parilla).

The people painted one crow white to scare the rest away,
A hawker selling rubber snakes made eighty bucks that day,
They hired an exorcist who spread minced garlic on the blades,
And Prue McGhoo thought saying,”Shoo!” should stop the raven raids.

Now, One Tooth Ted the truckie tied his Pit Bull to the bonnet,
But One Eyed Wanda Whistlethorpe had failed to see it on it,
See, she had parked beside him with her cat in charge, “Sweet Pea”,
And the crows all watched the show and had dessert chucked in for free.

All in all the town had gone stark raven flamin’ mad,
And all because the newspaper went on about this fad.
The locals couldn’t use their cars, especially when it rains,
Their rubbers all were pinched, and mate, you know how much that pains!

So they called on Johnny Howard to assist them in their plight,
But he was fairly stuck out in the Bush caught in a fight,
and Mr Latham crowed, “Why don’t you go and read a book.”
But The Nationals said they’d help out – with a Liberal grappling hook.

So they said their prayers and asked for a solution from the stars,
To stop these windscreen wiper snipers vandalising cars.
Then a hungry hairy hippie with his chips wrapped in the paper,
Was shocked to read about this raven rubber pinching caper.

He came up with the answer in a flash, he said, “Hey man
My Kombi has no windscreen, it’s an air conditioned van.
And if you have no windscreen well you’ve got no use for wipers,
No wipers means no rubbers means no ‘aaarking’ bloody snipers!”

So now around in Bentley life has settled down again,
You see they’ve ditched their windscreens, they’d much rather suffer rain
Than rubber robbing ravens raiding wiper blades at will,
And that journo got an OBE for crowing with such skill.


Would you like to be a featured poet?

I am very keen to hear from other bush poets who would like to feature in the newsletter. It's a great way to become known to a wider audience than you maybe already and an opportunity to promote yourself, your work and your products. Simply email me a photo, a biography and one poem to appear in the newsletter.


Events & Competitions

Rather than post all details of events and competitions in the newsletter, please go to the pages on the site at www.johnstaufferbooks.com . You can also have a look at the Bush Verse Contacts page on the site for a listing of regular events in your area and what clubs you might like to join.

If you know of a particular event, please simply post it on the Forum at the Bush Verse website and I will transfer it to the Events pages. There is now a special section on the Forum for Events, Competitions and the like. This is not only to give notice of events, but also to post results if you have been involved.


Your Chance To Win

The "Bush Song" Poetry Competition

Win what - you may well ask, and the answer is simply fame and glory. This issue's theme is the contribution of women to the building of our nation. Get your poems written and post it on the Forum at the Bush Verse site. All poems submitted will be judged by an anonymous bush poet (and I can assure you it isn't me) and the winner announced in the next edition of the newsletter.

We have found an excellent judge for our little competitions. The name of the judge is A. Judi Cater. Our thanks must go to this anonymous person who is putting in the hard yards in pouring over the works to select winners. This wonderful person has even agreed to do critiques on the work submitted, which will be in a positive vein, to assist writers. If anyone wishes to contact A. Judi Cater, they can do so via [email protected] and I will pass it on to the judge.

The winner of our December competition for writing a poem on an Australian Christmas is ......., surprise, surprise - Glenny Palmer who is also our Featured Poet for this month. Glenny won the competition with her poem "A Frog's View of Christmas".. Congratulations on a job well done and many thanks to all the other poets who submitted their work on the Message Board.

Here is Glenny's winning poem:-

“A FROG’S VIEW OF CHRISTMAS” © Glenny Palmer 2004

I’m a frog and by nature my job is to croak,
I’ve been stuck in the dry dusty clay, it’s a joke,
and the Humans put signs up, “ Please pray for the rain”,
so despite my sore throat I got croaking again.

So I yodeled and croaked ‘til my vocal chords strained,
and then…. hallelujah! it finally rained.

Then the more that I croaked, well the more that it rained,
‘til I held the award for “Best Croaker” ordained,
and the rivers all flooded, we even had hail,
and I backstroked and breaststroked and flipped like a whale.

Now my skin is much greener, like new Brussels sprouts,
I’m quite sure I’m the best looking frog hereabouts.
And Oh! what a Christmas my talents will bring
for the poor dowdy Humans, at last they can sing.

They can play in the puddles and roll in the mud,
and laugh like I do when they fall with a thud,
They can hide in their grass that’s now two metre’s tall,
Oh! what joy and what fun I’ve provided for all.

But the Humans, (strange creatures, I can’t work them out),
are putting up signs saying, “Pray for the drought.”
It’s really too much for my little green brain,
When they get what they pray for, they whine and complain.

So this Christmas I think I’ll give Humans away,
I’ll invite all my friends to come frolic and play,
tadpoles and turtles, mosquitoes, (yum) too,
and even a toad, (‘though we usually blue).

‘Cause isn’t that what Christmas Day is meant for?
to settle old scores and throw open your door
to let gratitude in, for the gifts we are given,
be they rain, hail or sun, they’re our blessings from Hivven. ….(So I can’t spell…I’m a frog!)

And now for the official comments from our judge, A. Judi Cater who we thank very much for the time and trouble taken to peruse all the entries.

"JUDGES COMMENT

WINNING POEM
A FROG’S VIEW OF CHRISTMAS by Glenny Palmer
This winning poem was very well written and contained strong, light hearted, original humour throughout. The author cleverly wove expressive phrases into the lines, (‘flipped like a whale’, ‘dowdy humans’, ‘…greener, like new Brussel sprouts’), which added colour to the content and to enhance the flow throughout used correct capitalization and punctuation. The vital elements of rhyme and rhythm were, in the main, also strongly adhered to.
It was pleasing to see the writer capturing the all-too-human condition of whinging when we don’t have rain, and then complaining when we get too much… shades of Hanrahan perhaps!
Congratulations! In a word, “Hivvenly”!

OVERALL COMMENT
Generally speaking, the content flow of poems was very good, showing good humour and the use of suitably expressive language for the topic. Rhyming words were, in the main, accurate and themes, while most featured Christmas, featured some very original concepts.
The metre or rhythm of most entries does need to be addressed. When beginning to write, set your meter pattern in the first verse and continue this same pattern in every other verse. If you are a new writer, start with short lines, keeping an accurate meter count as you write. After finishing your first draft, go through several times with a fine-tooth comb and find the lines which are too long or short. It’s worth the effort and you will find that persistence guarantees improvement.
Correct punctuation is vital to ensure correct content flow, assisting readers to interpret your poem.
Capital letters at the beginning of every line may well be a tradition for those who wrote rhyme in the past but they and everyone who persists in this endeavour do so against the basic rules of grammar. Do we use a capital letter, other than for a proper name, in the middle of a sentence? NO!!

To all entrants, my congratulations on your personal effort and your continued contribution to Australian Bush Poetry.

A. Judi Cater
JUDGE

We have now set up a separate section on the Forum for Bushsong Competition Entries. Please make sure you post your work there as it will make it a lot easier for our judge to access your work.


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